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  1. Hi Micah,

    First off, awesome banner image and very nice job on making it tie into the introduction! Also, nice touch with the shooting star. I really like how you managed to make it feel more personal as this guide or storyteller is talking directly to us the whole time in the introduction. I wonder if he or she will become an important figure in the stories themselves as they have been given some background, or if they are just meant to guide us through and inform us of these journeys. I wonder, will you be starting the stories from his childhood as you have mentioned it in the introduction, or will you beginning when he start his journey of redemption? I also wonder how you will portray him in your stories? Hanuman was one of my favorite characters from the Ramayana, so I very much look forward to stories and hopefully learn more of his past.

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  2. Hello Michah!
    Great job on your introduction segment of your story! First, I want to say that your site layout looks great! The picture of the mountains, sky, and stars all fit your story and help imagine what it would look like at the temple on the mountain. I really liked your idea of introducting Hanuman character in the way that you are one of his followers. I also thought your story about the journey and how the narrator met hanuman. The shooting star deatail was one of my favorite parts, details like that really bring me, as a reader, more into the story! great job so far! I cant wait to read what else you come up with hanuman's journey. I really liked his character in our reading assignments and i like what you've done here as well! keep it up!

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  3. Hello Micah, this is a great start to your portfolio. I really enjoyed the upbeat and exciting tone you use in your writing. Overall I like your website a lot, however I believe you can spice it up a bit by adding illustrations and more visual clues to grab the audience attention. You seem to have a solid plot line set up with the characters. Hunuman is a great starting piece as he is a versitale character and have many dymanics about himself that will help you explore ideas. Maybe start thinking about questions in regards to character plot and who else you can include in the story. Overall I believe you are in the right direction for this project. I would take a session to brainstorm, this would be best for revision week. Keep up the good work.

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  4. Hi Micah! Great job on the intro for your project! I really liked the set up of your website and think that it is super easy to navigate! I also really like the photos that you chose for your design, they are so calming and fit in well with the theme of your story. Just a suggestion, but I would like to see some pictures of Hanuman in the future as well on your site, I think that would be a fun addition! I like that you decided to write about Hanuman, as he was one of the most interesting characters to me, and I really liked that he overlapped in both the Mahabharata and the Ramayana. One thing is that I noticed a few minor grammatical errors, but nothing super minor, just maybe a few things you can mark for the review next week. I am really excited to read more of your writing in the future, and am looking forward to seeing where you take this story next!

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  5. Hey Micah,
    This is my first time visiting your portfolio and I can say it is really great. After reading the introduction I can see you have a really different writing style. I love how it seems like an open conversation I’m engaging in. Your adaptation of the story of Hanuman was a great read as well. I noticed in your authors notes you took inspiration from a couple Hanuman stories. Maybe consider describing some of these stories in the notes so your reader can have a little knowledge as to where your story is derived. Overall, though, I really liked the different additions you made after reading I can definitely see there is a lot to the character Hanuman. This provides you with a lot of writing material. I look forward to seeing where you decide to take this project. Another tip is you should try the collapsable text for your authors notes, its a simple addition and will look good with the layout.

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